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Mightydein

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This cartoon looks a lot like animation recorded onto a VHS tape.

I usually find tracking errors and VHS artifacts to be very visually annoying.

Bad tracking can sometimes render the tape as unwatchable.

The VCR effects actually has the appearance of being VHS in origin.

Most simulated VHS effects use filters created in image manipulation programs.

The VHS tape illusion in other submissions don't look nearly as convincing.

Did you actually tape this animation on videotape?

Your effect on animation on VHS could be more polished by using other special effects too.

You could create animation in Mario Paint and record it onto a blank tape.

You could also create animation using a rostrum camera, film and different art supplies.

After the film is developed than the next step is transferring the footage to video.

Filming animation with a rostrum camera and transfer to VHS is a very expensive process.

You could also utilize your scanner, art supplies and image manipulation program to create traditional animation.

Edit the images together in a video editor.

You can than record the resulting animation on a VHS tape.

You can also create simulated VHS tape effects in an image manipulation program.

There are a lot of possibility with the VHS effect.

Some of my ideas might actually cost money to do.

I merely include these ideas to inspire your imagination to create inexpensive ways of creating cool animation effects.

Free is the optimal for your animation budget.

This submission was a very entertaining watch and was a pleasure to watch.

- Mightydein

Gerkinman responds:

Thanks for the thoughtful response! I actually did all the animation in flash and the VHS effects were created in After Effects with a mixture of post and real VHS footage used with different blending modes. I work as a visual effects artist so the effect only took a couple of hours. I am glad you found it convincing, that means I pulled it off! ^^

A very entertaining trailer for your animated series.

I love how the trailer quickly sales itself without unnecessary time filler.

The trailer would be way too short if it were an actual movie.

A trailer acts as a free sample and is intended to grab your attention.

The trailer highlights the camera effects moving with the characters.

I noticed the great fighting poses in the stick figure animation.

The trailer needed more emphasis on displaying the show's title.

You want to make certain that title is remembered.

An effective trailer is not only entertaining but also sales itself.

You did an excellent job at promoting your animated series.

The trailer wasted no time in highlighting the cool stuff about your cartoon.

I look forward to watching more of your work.

- Mightydein

The narration made a lot sense out of the details in this stick figure battle movie.

I love the added touch of on-screen text to represent character names upon introduction.

The character animations moved with your characters.

The stick figures have better poses than lots of other submissions.

Creating dynamic poses can be transfered onto other forms of drawing.

Nicely done and very entertaining.

I will review the other episodes later.

- Mightydein

LetThereBeLenny responds:

thank you brother!

The first 16 seconds of your animation were very attention grabbing.

I love how you created animation using image manipulation programs.

I assume the frames were collected into a video editor program.

I love the multiple camera angles.

I love the visual variety in your short animation.

I assume you wanted feedback before moving forward.

You just need to make the intro a lot longer.

Upload the complete movie and I will be able to provide more in-depth feedback.

I look forward to seeing the finished product.

You are off to a good start.

- Mightydein

I been looking forward to this new episode of Fay.

The drawings have improved since the pervious episodes of this series.

This show never really answers any questions about Fay's androgynous nature.

Not answering any questions about Fay's ambiguous gender creates a certain mysterious aura around him.

The focus of the episode is on how Fay interacts with the world around him.

Fay is universally hated by his peers.

This movie should have explored Fay's other relationships including his family.

The other episodes contain some very important information about Fay's character.

References to pervious episodes would have strengthened your narrative.

Pervious episodes contained a lot of important information important to this submission's story.

Each episode of this series act as stand alone cartoons; However, an increased attention to continuity will make more effective storylines.

I love your use of a different animation techniques to represent thoughts inside Fay's head.

A lot of your visuals were very strange and certain background animations were ominous.

You still have a few uncolored areas; However, the backgrounds have increased detail since your pervious submissions.

More detail means that it becomes more difficult to spot mistakes.

Increased detail means a longer time in the clean up stages.

The dead people in your movie could use a bit more detail in the drawings.

Do an internet search for appropriate images to use as reference material.

If you have a camera than you can easily take pictures of buildings, clouds, trees and other forms of potential reference material.

Your one city background was simply a series of square buildings.

A city is actually very hard to draw and most people draw a simple series of square buildings.

A city is full of buildings in an entire variety of shapes.

Look at photos of a city and practice drawing the buildings.

If you live in an actual city than you can use your own surroundings as reference material for drawing.

Keep making these new episodes of The Fay Series.

This is your best work so far.

Don't give up.

- Mightydein

This submission has an interesting visual style.

I found the live action backgrounds to be off-putting.

Lets ignore the live action backgrounds for the rest of this review.

I love how you place a lot of effort into working out the poses.

The stick figures have some very great fighting poses within the animation.

The stick animation would look more polished if lights and shadows were applied.

The lights and shadows on your stick figures could interact with the environments.

I enjoy seeing the characters move with the backgrounds.

That is a really cool animation technique and I may need to steal that trick.

This movie looks promising.

You are off to a good start.

- Mightydein

LetThereBeLenny responds:

thanks for the review! i really appreciate your advice, the entire movie is actually right here in 4 episodes

http://www.newgrounds.com/playlists/view/4e98d118d234560a4131e23d84815588

please watch them! i would love to hear what you think of them seriously!

This quick little gag made for entertaining submission of a few seconds.

Usually 11 seconds is way too short for a cartoon.

A limited amount of time means proving your point quickly.

I think that has been accomplished with your movie.

The voice actors did a great job.

Your cartoon was based on a web comic; However, the characters in your cartoon display more emotion.

The annoyed man had more convincing emotion.

His body language more effectively sold annoyance in this submission when compared to the original web comic.

This cartoon has really improve upon that web comic.

Good work.

- Mightydein

I noticed some uncolored areas and gaps on the pine apple character.

Take extra time into searching for uncolored areas and fill them in.

Most animation programs have a zoom-in and zoom-out feature.

Use different shades of white for eyes, teeth and other things.

Two objects can be the same color but in different shades of color.

Play around with your colors more often.

Your characters could use some more lively poses even just for a conversation.

Real people often move their hands during conversation to hold your attention.

If you are uninterested in the topic of conversation; The person talking to you becomes increasingly animated.

Your talking characters need to display more body language and facial expression during conversation.

The two characters only moved their lips during conversation.

Body language is a missing element in the conversation between your two characters.

Try to imagine watching your cartoon without sound.

Would it still be entertainment without the added element of sound?

Sound added a lot to your cartoon.

The audio was very humorous and some of the sight gags were very silly.

That pineapple character looks silly.

You are on the right-track by using sight gags and playing around with the camera.

You just need to play around with the body language of your characters more often.

- Mightydein

Megacharlie responds:

Thanks for the suggestions, but we did make this in about 1 hour XD

I'm currently working on a new episode of Stretchyman (my main cartoon) and I've been working on it for about a month and a half now XD

Thanks!

-Charlie

The animation for your movie was choppy in a lot of places; However, I'm pleased to notice careful attention placed into the poses.

I love the exaggerated poses combined with some squash and stretch technique.

The character design for your character looked crude.

You used a lot of very basic shapes for the character's facial features.

A bit more detail could make the character design more polished; However, animation becomes increasingly difficult to create with added detail.

Understanding the human form will help you with creating a stylised versions of human characters.

People watching will give you a lot of inspiration for character designs.

The way you draw hands needs a bit of work.

Take the time to observe your subjects in full detail.

Draw your subject based on these observations.

You can still simplify the forms of your drawings while making observations.

Movement of your drawings is more important than an unnecessarily high workload placed into detail.

You want to include good drawings combined with the illusion of movement.

Keep experimenting with your animation and continue trying new things.

You are on the right track.

- Mightydein

cecameron responds:

This is an excellent critique, I just find it odd you'd leave it on such a quick project - I'm interested in what you'd have to say for some of my other works.
Thank you for the comment!

I created cartoons for newgrounds since 2003 and collaborated with artists such as livecorpse, Billy Monks and others.
I'm also known as PowerRangerYELLOW on my alt account.
I hope to make more cartoons soon.

Age 41

Internet animator

Canada

Joined on 1/8/02

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